‘It struck me in the night that this might have started earlier.’
I’m not a big fan of instant foreshadowing.
I often find that it’s too cliched, giving away a huge part of the plot before the action can progress and before we can learn to care about the characters and what could possibly happen to them. If you know something bad is going to happen to someone, there’s no point in wasting your hope that things might turn out okay.
In this instance, however, I thought it worked really well.
Paul Morris wakes up in the middle of the night, ruminating on something that has happened in his life. It’s dark and disorienting, throwing you straight into the action. His voice is established within the first few paragraphs – he’s a strong character, and you know exactly what motivates him within a couple of pages.